contrary to popular belief poetry does not have to rhyme
it needs to flow and you can use several things to do so

alitteration...the repetition of a letter to starts each word of a line

the repetition of a portion of a phrase to start or end a line

the start and conclussion of a story or concept much like and essay or story
even if it leaves the reader dangling

writing first hand or third hand but always bringing the reader into the picture

being the poetry editor for both my high school and college tenures, i deem it worth poetry
and quite good if you open you mind and accept it does not have to rhyme

read it and you will see there is a cadence to it

good job K

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I know you said
Why can't you just get over it,
It turned my whole world around
and i kind of like it
I made by bed, and I sleep like a baby,
With no regrets and I don't mind saying,
It's a sad sad story
That a mother will teach her daughter
that she ought to hate a perfect stranger.
And how in the world
Can the words that I said
Send somebody so over the edge
That they'd write me a letter
Saying that I better shut up and sing
Or my life will be over

Obi......take it easy with the soya sauce ok... (I know I'm gonna get it)

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lol
you safe right now

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I know you said
Why can't you just get over it,
It turned my whole world around
and i kind of like it
I made by bed, and I sleep like a baby,
With no regrets and I don't mind saying,
It's a sad sad story
That a mother will teach her daughter
that she ought to hate a perfect stranger.
And how in the world
Can the words that I said
Send somebody so over the edge
That they'd write me a letter
Saying that I better shut up and sing
Or my life will be over

LOLOL at the soya sauce!!! Thanks Obi! I thought it was a great description of most females I know!

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lol
i think it is mostly a facade
just gotta know how to truly treat a woman

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I know you said
Why can't you just get over it,
It turned my whole world around
and i kind of like it
I made by bed, and I sleep like a baby,
With no regrets and I don't mind saying,
It's a sad sad story
That a mother will teach her daughter
that she ought to hate a perfect stranger.
And how in the world
Can the words that I said
Send somebody so over the edge
That they'd write me a letter
Saying that I better shut up and sing
Or my life will be over

Honestly, as I get older it becomes less of a facade and more the truth. When I was younger I had a lot of insecurities and would really put on an act. But now, I'm not afraid to say no, do as I please, be my own self, etc. Its very refreshing.

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lol
ya i know how ya feel
i remember being younger and grimping about crotchey old peeps
now all i do is ***** about kids these days

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I know you said
Why can't you just get over it,
It turned my whole world around
and i kind of like it
I made by bed, and I sleep like a baby,
With no regrets and I don't mind saying,
It's a sad sad story
That a mother will teach her daughter
that she ought to hate a perfect stranger.
And how in the world
Can the words that I said
Send somebody so over the edge
That they'd write me a letter
Saying that I better shut up and sing
Or my life will be over

OMG me too!!!! I'm actually intimidated by most teenagers.

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i'm not intimidated by them
more disgusted

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I know you said
Why can't you just get over it,
It turned my whole world around
and i kind of like it
I made by bed, and I sleep like a baby,
With no regrets and I don't mind saying,
It's a sad sad story
That a mother will teach her daughter
that she ought to hate a perfect stranger.
And how in the world
Can the words that I said
Send somebody so over the edge
That they'd write me a letter
Saying that I better shut up and sing
Or my life will be over

I hear you. I'm so glad my son's such a charming young man now. He's already been thru his ****ery. Now he scowls at the retarded ones too.

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so young
sure he's not gay?

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I know you said
Why can't you just get over it,
It turned my whole world around
and i kind of like it
I made by bed, and I sleep like a baby,
With no regrets and I don't mind saying,
It's a sad sad story
That a mother will teach her daughter
that she ought to hate a perfect stranger.
And how in the world
Can the words that I said
Send somebody so over the edge
That they'd write me a letter
Saying that I better shut up and sing
Or my life will be over

I think I should withdraw. I like the other poem better.

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Saw a guest veiwing this...when I saw the title I tried to guess who would make a thread with that title....then I clicked on it and low and behold.....I was right....lololololol

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I'll take that as a compliment Teach Nuh care what anyone thinks.

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Oh no it was mos def meant as a compliment...and it was a great poem also....for real.......I just thought it was funny that I knew right away by the title...you know I have nothin but love you Jam

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